In storytelling, our number-one job is to make readers care. We want to ensure that our fiction captivates them on many levels and that our characters seem like living, breathing people who continue to exist in readers’ minds long after the book closes. To create this level of realism, we must delve deep into our world and our characters so we can show who they are at every opportunity, drawing the reader in closer.
When it comes to characters, showing rather than telling is the most powerful means of providing insight into the personality of each member of a story’s cast, including the protagonist. Simply put, letting readers see for themselves who our characters are through their behavior is much more riveting than us explaining it through bloated chunks of information. A writer can use narrative to introduce a vengeful character, but it would be much more spellbinding to describe her actions as she traps a former abuser on his fishing boat, douses the decks in gasoline, and tosses on a flare. It is what a character does, thinks, and feels that readers find most compelling. The setting can play a vital role in drawing out new layers of our characters for readers to discover.
Getting Personal with Settings
In real life we see a lot of generic—food brands, medicine, cleaning supplies, bottled water, batteries, and other bits and bobs. There are even certain locations we spend time at that are fairly universal across the map, having the same look or feel. A place such as a lake, the stands at a sporting event, a movie theater, or the hallways of a high school will have similar features regardless of whether it is located in California or British Columbia. In fact, because of this commonality, authors often use these types of settings in novels, knowing readers will acclimate quickly and begin filling in the details on their own, leaving more word count flexibility for other things, such as describing the action.
While we do want to encourage readers to participate in the story by imagining the world to some degree, there is no room for “generic” in fiction beyond the occasional transitional scene. Using commonality as a crutch to avoid creating meaningful description shortchanges the reader and causes the writer to miss out on valuable opportunities to deepen bonds of empathy.
Transitional settings aside, if a location is important enough to be part of a scene, then it should also have a specific identity. How do we bring this about? Through personalizing the setting to our protagonist, sculpting it to reveal characterizing details about who he or she is.
Some settings are simpler to personalize than others. A character’s home or workspace is easy to fill with details that indicate her personality type, interests, and hobbies, as well as her values and beliefs. A work cubicle that comes with the standard office supplies but also has a calendar with vacation days exuberantly circled surrounded by a photo tornado of past trips tells us plenty about the character who works there. For starters, she likely isn’t in love with this job. She also has a strong sense of work-life balance and prizes travel. A closer look at the photos might reveal even more insight: that she loves to ski, that she has a young family, or maybe even that she drinks too much. This would be a much different character than someone whose workspace is antiseptic neat and bereft of decoration except for a single motivational poster to the tune of Fortune Favors the Bold. In this case, readers would see that the character works hard, is highly organized and opportunistic, and she sees this job as a stepping-stone to something greater.
Amazing, isn’t it? All that characterization through the simple placement of personal setting details, and without a whole lot of work.
When the setting isn’t a place that the character is particularly intimate with, we can still bring out personalization details that reveal the layers of who she is. What a character notices, feels, and interacts with in each location will show readers more about what is important to her.
Imagine a woman waiting for a cab outside a row of shops along a main street. It’s closing in on Christmas, so holiday music drifts from speakers outside the shops, colorful tinsel and glittery bows flutter as doors open and close, and a dusting of snow gives everything that clean feel. It’s the first time she’s been out in a week after a recent miscarriage and has just come from an appointment with her doctor. How could the author personalize this setting to show who she is and what she believes in while hinting at this sensitive situation?
Linda waited at the curb, scanning the oncoming traffic for the telltale yellow paint indicating a cab. Behind her, boots crunched through snow and shopping bags crinkled with cold as the bustling midafternoon shoppers hurried to finish off their Christmas lists. Cheerful holiday music floated out of store speakers and an unbearable tightness filled her throat. Christmas. One more bit of normalcy shoved in her face, one more thing rolling forward like a locomotive, ignoring her need to hide away and grieve.
The doctor’s visit had sapped her energy and she just wanted to get home, but each cab that passed seemed to already have a fare. Linda gave up and was heading for a nearby bus stop when she noticed a child standing alone in front of a toy store. Her breath caught at the perfection of the toddler, his cheeks lit with the glow of the winking lights on display, standing on tiptoe, his fragile breath fogging the glass. Shoppers walked past, paying him no mind, and something heavy settled in her gut. No one stopped; no one reached for his hand. Who was watching out for him? Where were his parents? Someone could come along and scoop him up, and only the ghost prints of his mittens on the snowy ledge would show that he’d been there at all.
She jolted toward the boy, heat flashing through her body. Just as she reached him, a woman’s voice called out in Spanish. The child spun and ran toward a parked car at the curb, where a mother was loading two other children into the vehicle. The boy jumped and wobbled, pointing back at the display, and his mother laughed as she lifted him into his car seat.
Linda trembled, watching the car drive off. She touched her forehead, running the scene through her mind, wondering how she’d missed the obvious, how she’d completely misread the situation. Thankfully, a cab pulled into the slot that the mother’s car had vacated, and she rushed to nab it before someone else could. She needed to get home now more than ever.
In this scene, we plant characterizing details within the setting. What is revealed about Linda? She’s still very much caught in the current of grief and is resentful of Christmas upstaging her loss. She’s also practical—looking for a bus stop when catching a cab becomes difficult. And then there’s the toddler, who becomes a focal point for her deeply embedded maternal instincts, and the interaction between mother and child shows readers what Linda wants most and yet cannot have. Through specific detail, this setting becomes personalized to the character; readers are carried along as she interacts with it, experiencing her churning emotions just as she does.
When it comes to painting a setting for readers, think beyond “window dressing” detail. Get personal, get inside your protagonist’s head, and show the world in a way that allows your audience to discover the deeper side of your hero or heroine.
The Emotional Power of Point of View (POV) Filtering
Chances are, you’ve heard of deep point of view. Imagine a camera lens that zooms in for a close-up; deep POV is when the description filters directly through the point-of-view character (usually the protagonist) on a deep, emotional level. Readers see what he or she sees and feel what he or she feels. It allows for intimate characterization and creates a shared experience in which the story comes alive through the character’s senses, thoughts, beliefs, emotional focus, and judgments. Done well, lines between reality and fiction blur temporarily as readers are caught up in what the POV character experiences as events happen.
Not every story uses deep POV, but all writers work to create a level of closeness between the character and reader, which requires a deft hand to bring about. The setting is the story element that facilitates this, since conveying the hero’s emotion-driven viewpoint makes a scene come alive. Experiencing details from the setting through the protagonist’s emotions and senses makes the reader feel truly part of the story. This means that choosing the right setting for each scene is important to not only help events unfold but increase reader-character connection.
Taking advantage of a deeper POV means really understanding how crucial sensory description is to the story (which will be covered more in a later section) and how settings should include an emotional value. This is where the setting has a specific emotional tie to the protagonist and possibly other characters. It holds meaning in some way, or acts as a symbol, charging up the scene.
For example, it may be that the setting is symbolic of some past life event and serves as a reminder of what happened and the feelings associated with it. Imagine a character being asked to an important business lunch in the same restaurant where his girlfriend turned down his marriage proposal. Even though time has passed, maybe years, an echo of that hurt and rejection will affect him while he’s there and, in turn, will influence his behavior.
If the setting is someplace neutral to the protagonist and there is no emotional value based on past knowledge or experience, we can still bring one to the forefront by creating mood. This is done by choosing sensory descriptions that reinforce a specific emotion (fear, peacefulness, unease, pride, etc.) that we want the character (and the reader) to feel. Mood can also be created through the use of light and shadow, universal symbolism, weather, and other techniques, which are all covered in depth in The Rural Setting Thesaurus. Regardless of whether emotional values are intrinsic or are added via mood, choosing a setting that evokes an emotional response is important, since a character’s feelings about his environment add realism to the scene while drawing readers in.
So how do we go about creating this emotional value? The first step is to brainstorm the best setting match for a particular scene. This is achieved by looking at what will happen in the scene and which emotions are at play. First, identify your hero’s scene goal—what must he do, learn, or achieve? And what do you want him and the other characters involved to feel? Once you know the answers to these questions, imagine different types of settings where this scene might take place, ones that fit the story and are logical locations for your character to visit. Make a list if you like. Often the settings that pop immediately to mind are the most obvious, but with a bit of digging, some more creative and interesting choices can be unearthed too.
Once you have a few options, look at each potential setting in turn and think of how you can describe the location to evoke a specific mood that will make your character’s emotional reactions more potent. Tension can be a factor too. Depending on what is about to happen in the scene, you might want your character to feel off-balance. Or maybe you wish to lull him into a false sense of security so he doesn’t see what’s coming. Either way, the details you pick to describe the setting will help steer his emotions.
Finally, think about what the character will learn, decide, or do as a result of what happens in the scene. The setting can act as an amplifier for this end result simply by surrounding the character with emotional triggers that will lead him toward that decision or action.
Imagine a man who, at the urging of his business magnate parents, has worked his way up at a capital investment firm. Offered a powerful new position that will finally please his success-driven parents, he discovers that he will need to travel almost constantly, meaning he will have to sacrifice having a family. Maybe he is in a committed relationship, and he and his partner have been talking about adoption. This career move would end that dream.
As he wrestles with this choice, we want to place him in a location that we can stock with emotional triggers to help direct his thoughts. In this case, we could choose a park where his parents used to bring him as a child (supplying an emotional value), or place an urban playground right across the street from the high-rise where he works (symbolizing his two worlds in conflict).
Each location will provide excellent opportunities to place emotional triggers. Imagine our character noticing children climbing on a slide or kicking around a soccer ball in a field, or a young couple pushing a baby stroller along a concrete path. These triggers represent a future he might have if he rejects the offer and stays to build a family. Or perhaps we choose a different trigger in the setting, such as a father ruffling his son’s hair as he successfully flies a kite in the park, representing the yearning our character has for his own father’s approval. A third option might be to show an older man in a power suit going for a lunchtime walk, dominating a conversation via his cell phone. This trigger acts as a glimpse of who our hero could become if he sticks to the career path: rich, powerful, respected . . . and potentially alone.
Choosing a strong setting for the scene and then seeding it with these triggers creates a push-pull effect, one that amplifies a character’s internal struggle. Through the hero’s interaction with the setting, we can home in on the needs, desires, moral beliefs, fears, and personal biases that drive his behavior. How the protagonist reacts to these triggers will not only allow characterization to naturally seep through, it also alludes to past experiences that may still have power over him in the form of emotional wounds.
For a practical guide to evaluating a setting’s emotional value and possible triggers, see the Emotional Value Tool in Appendix A.
Using the Setting to Characterize the Rest of the Story’s Cast
Not only does the setting let us characterize the protagonist, it can also reveal the traits, attitudes, beliefs, and emotions of non-POV characters—something that is often difficult to do unless one is writing in omniscient POV.
Have you ever attended a reception or wake in a deceased person’s home? Few situations can bring together an eclectic mix of personalities like a funeral, and the aftermath in which family and friends socialize and pay their respects can become a painful bed of hot, bright coals. Gathering together people who may have chosen to remain apart is the perfect recipe for opening deep wounds. Stress and grief, not to mention alcohol, can fuel words that are better left unsaid. Conversations can also turn into confessionals in which secrets are let out of their boxes and arguments can resurrect old feuds or give birth to new ones.
Take the following estranged family coming together to mourn the passing of their mother—brothers and sisters, in-laws and cousins, who are close and distant, some of whom don’t always get along. As they gather to halfheartedly pick at a meal and catch up during the wake, each person will have a different viewpoint as events unfold. While it can be a challenge to show all of this through the POV character’s perspective, the setting is once again the vehicle that gives us a way to do so:
To Laura, the parlor was always the coldest room. The pale-green paint and sheer lace curtains reinforced the chill, framing her mother’s pristine couch and the Oriental rug no one was allowed to step on. Someone had lit the fireplace, likely in hopes it might brighten the cheerless room, but the crackling heat didn’t seem to get far. This probably had less to do with the January snowfall spiralling outside the window and more with the people in the room with her.
Tammy and Rick had claimed the two suede wingbacks in the corner, regally waiting for the procession to arrive. Their hushed voices and sharp glances at Laura made it clear she featured in their conversation. Clearly her siblings were put out over Mother leaving the house to her, something they likely believed she had orchestrated while caring for her this last year. The truth was, Laura was as surprised as anyone. If anything, she expected the house to go to Charlie, the baby of the family and, she suspected, Mother’s secret favorite.
Laura took a sip of hot tea from a china cup, her gaze going to where Charlie stood at the bookcase pretending to browse. But the stoop of his shoulders told her that he’d spotted the framed picture she’d recently put there. It was one of Allan, his twin, who’d died of meningitis at age four. Laura had rescued the tipped-over picture from the back of the mantel, where it had been hidden by a cluster of Tammy’s family photos that she’d obviously moved to the center. Laura had dusted often enough to know that their mother had given everyone’s pictures equal billing, but equality was something Tammy never quite understood.
Laura crossed to Charlie, taking careful steps over the wooden floor to avoid clacking, as Tammy had done when she’d made her entrance in high heels and a too-short skirt.
“You okay?” She placed her hand on Charlie’s back.
“Remember when this was taken?” Her brother brushed his thumb over the smooth gold frame.
In the faded photo, Allan dangled by his arms from a low branch on the maple tree out back. Barely a sapling then, it now towered over the house. Laura gave a soft laugh. “How could I forget? Five minutes after Allan did something, you had to do it too.”
“Only, he didn’t manage to break his arm like I did.” Charlie smiled, his eyes wet, and replaced the picture on the shelf. She could only imagine what Mother’s death had dragged up for him; he’d hardly been old enough to really know what it was to be a twin before the specialness of it was stolen away.
The doorbell chimed, but Laura didn’t move to answer it. Marissa would get it. Charlie’s wife loved people and was a born hostess and child wrangler, and when she’d offered to take on those duties, Laura had been more than happy to let her.
Voices drifted from the hall as mourners stamped off the snow and shucked off coats. Odors of garlic and sage wafted from the foil-covered casserole dishes they carried. Laura’s chest tightened at the small talk and niceties that would have to take place before she’d be allowed to privately grieve. How long did these things go on for?
Her cup rattled ever so slightly against the saucer, and Charlie pulled something from his jacket. He tipped a pewter flask over the gold china rim, first hers, then his. The burn of scotch drifted up between them, and they shared a grin, youngest to oldest.
In this small scene, not only do setting details anchor the reader in this moment, they become a conduit for characterization and emotional showing. As each separate character interacts with the setting, we gain a sense of who they are and what they feel, despite remaining steadfastly in Laura’s point of view. Symbols are incorporated, helping to form an image of what’s being felt. The décor chosen for the room—pale mint, lace curtains, the rug everyone was forced to walk around and not on, even the weather outside—these all help show the mood in this scene and reinforce the idea that distance exists between family members. By the placement of photos on the mantel we see that Mother was fair, yet her choices for this room suggest she was fussy and perhaps a bit unfeeling herself, which may have factored into the current family dynamic. The picture of Allan, in particular, becomes a symbol of loss and allows a tiny snippet of the past to shine through.
The interaction over the picture, and then later the flask, shows readers that Laura and Charlie are close. The gossipy nature between Tammy and Rick and their choice of seats implies that they hold a view of self-importance. Tammy’s altering the arrangement of family photos to place hers at the center speaks volumes. And even if we did not know that Laura cared for her mother this past year, her rescuing Allan’s picture conveys her role as caretaker in this family.
As you can see, done well, descriptive choices and the setting itself can actively convey so much to readers, especially when it comes to characterization and mood building.