Inspired by Zelda Sayre, F. Scott Fitzgerald used excepts of her diaries in his novels.
The original sentence says that excerpts of Sayre’s diaries felt inspired by Sayre and this feeling of inspiration caused them to enter Fitzgerald’s novels. The revision makes much more sense, saying that Fitzgerald felt inspired by Sayre and used her writing in his own works.
A bookstore with a café seems like heaven on earth to an avid lifelong reader like me.
As originally written, the sentence says the bookstore has been an enthusiastic reader. The revised sentence makes clear that the author has been an avid reader.