I think it’s better to not rush into getting married right after college. Of course everyone is different, but I think when you graduate from college in many ways you are still growing up. The gap in maturity from high school to college is huge, and the gap from college to adulthood is even larger. When you graduate college you are not really a full adult yet. Many people start paying rent for the first time, some start cooking for themselves for the first time, or start managing their own money for the first time. You are suddenly in a new world with new responsibilities and the learning curve is quick. It takes some time to get used to being an adult.
Monogomous marriage is a deep part of our culture. Choosing the person you are going to spend the rest of your life with is a huge decision. This person will be your romantic partner, your business partner in many ways, and your co-parent if you choose to have children. When you commit to another person you should be fully capable of making adult decisions in a way I don’t think most 22 year olds are capable of. Entering the work force is a huge adjustment. Living in the real world and taking care of yourself as an adult is challenging. I think you need time to learn who you are as an adult before you make any adult decisions that change the trajectory of the rest of your life.
Of course, some people who are in love and want to get married right out of college are right. They could get married on graduation day and be married for the rest of their lives because they happenned to find the right person. But why rush into things? If you’ve found the person you’re meant to be with it doesn’t matter if you marry them at 22 or at 32. You might as well wait until you’ve both grown into who you’re meant to be to enter into a marriage. It only makes that decision more meaningful and special.
The student takes a clear stand and provides multiple reasons why she believes people should wait until they’re older to marry. In the last paragraph, she acknowledges that some people may do well by marrying right away. Acknowledging that the other point of view does have merit is a good way to make your own argument more persuasive. In the middle of the essay, she uses the world “adult” so many times that it becomes repetitive. Try to find ways to vary your language. Use synonyms where you can.