16c Simplify the structure.

Simplifying sentences and using stronger verbs can make writing more direct. Look for opportunities to strengthen the verb.

The example reads, The financial analyst claimed that because of volatile market conditions she could not (strikethrough) make an (end strikethrough) estimate (strikethrough) of (end strikethrough) the company’s future profits.

The text below reads, The verb estimate is more vigorous and concise than make an estimate of.

The colorless verbs is, are, was, and were frequently generate excess words.

The example reads, Investigators (strikethrough) were involved in studying (end strikethrough) (insert) studied (end insert) the effect of classical music on unborn babies.

The text below reads, The revision is more direct and concise. The action (studying), originally appearing in a subordinate structure, has become a strong verb, studied.